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New technologies - protection or destruction of interpersonal relations?

Almost no one imagine our modern world without computers, cars or mobile phones. Those things are already as needful as water and air, becoming inseparable parts of our lives. Having made them easier, new technologies changed completely humans’ awareness.

It is public knowledge that traditional ways of communication are slowly rejected because social networking sites have become their more comfortable replacement. Going this way, people as internet users are still in touch with their friends, with whom they can communicate actually all the time. Moreover, we have opportunities to talk with famous people like politicians, athletes or artists what is characteristic for users of Twitter. Apart from that, today, there is no limitations on communication by typing. Regardless of a distance between talkers, high technologies make us able to talk face to face. Without any doubt, All those things improve human relations.
Nevertheless, the new technologies have also affected youngsters who can not do without smartphones or tablets. They prefer communicating by the internet than sociable meetings what causes disappearing strong and real friendships of them.

To conclude, I strongly believe that the new technologies are essential for well-functioning, as well as an efficient communication. However, some of them do not favor people owing to kill relationships between us.

Bylam troszeczke surowa, ale zrozumiesz dlaczego....
Almost no one 'imagine' (no one tutaj jest 3os.l.poj, to czasownik ma inna koncowke) 'our' (tzn - kto to jest, ludzie gdzies w Amazonian jungle, czy tylko Polacy, czy kto? nie jest jasne) modern world without computers, cars or mobile phones. Those things are already as needful as water and air, becoming inseparable parts of 'our' (mysle, ze gdzies tam w Brazylii nikt tak nie powie, nie uzywaj 'we' our' bo jak narazie to nie wiemy do kogo sie odnosisz) lives. Having made them easier, new technologies changed completely 'humans’' (coz to slowo mi nie siedzie dobrze, moze lepiej 'people's) awareness.

It 'is' (za silne slowo - to nie 'jest', tylko przypuszczamy, ze jest taka mozliwosc - musisz sie nauczyc pisac tak jak politycy mowia, wachac sie, siedziec na plocie, bo jak narazie to nie mozesz tego kategorycznie potwierdzic) public knowledge that traditional ways of communication are slowly (dalabym tutaj 'being') rejected because social networking sites have become their more comfortable replacement. 'Going this way' (jest takie ang. slowo, 'consequently'), people as internet users are still in touch with their friends, with whom they can communicate 'actually' (a jak mozna communicate 'not actually' to jest takie nijakie slowo, nic nie znaczace) all the time. Moreover, 'we' (ja nie mam takiego wymagania z zycia, zeby swoj czas poswiecac na rozmowe z kims) have opportunities to talk with famous people like politicians, athletes or artists 'what' (cos mi tu sie nie podoba, mozna, which) is characteristic for users of Twitter (nie wiem co to jest).
Regardless of 'a' (zly przedimek, tutaj 'the') distance between 'talkers' (nie, poszukaj lepsze slowo, mozna interlocutors), high technologies make 'us' (popraw) able to talk face to face.
Nevertheless, the new technologies have also affected youngsters who can not do without smartphones (najgorszy wynalazek XX wieku - pozaluja jeszcze) or 'tablets' (napisz jakich, bo ja tylkko znam headache tablets). They prefer communicating by the internet than sociable meetings 'what' (daj inne slowo, prosze nie uzywac slowa 'what' jako zastepnik slowa 'co' jez. polskiego) 'causes' (nie, to nie jest 'cause' ale 'result') (daj tutaj przedimek 'the') disappearANCE OF strong and real friendships 'of' (zle slowo, daj tutaj 'between') them.

To conclude, I strongly believe that the new technologies are essential for 'well-functioning' (ale czego? ludzi, swiata? businesses?), as well as an efficient communication (dodaj tutaj slowo 'tool). However, some of them do not favor people owing to THE 'kill' (troche strong, bo to tez jest morderstwo, ale trzeba lagodniej...killing of ) relationships between 'us' (napisz people)

there is no limitations pomimo że tak się używa, imo jest błąd.
'technology' - countable
'high technology' - ain't

there is no limitations
...tak, to jest blad, sorry, nie zauwazylam.