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Jeszcze mam wątpliwości co do tego tekstu, sprawdzicie?:)

This year the winter is very severe and freezing. I don't like to waer winter hats because my hair is very long and they get tangled up. My mum always tells me so I put on a hat because it is very cold and I will be ill. Of course I don't listen to her. The following day I had a high fever, sore throat and runny nose. I felt very weak, still want to sleep and I couldn't eat anything. Of course I couldn't go to school and I had a lot of backlog. My mom was mad at me. I am sure, that the next time I will listen to the advice of my mother.

Proszę o poprawę :)

This year the winter is very severe and IT IS freezing. I don't like to 'waer' (ortog) winter hats because my hair is very long and they get tangled up. My mum always tells me so I put on a hat because it is very cold and I 'will' (nie, zly modal, tutaj 'could' bo nikt nie gwarantuje, ze jak nie wlozysz 'hat' to bedziesz ill) be ill. Of course I 'don't' (tutaj lepiej wypadalo by 'didn't) listen to her. The following day I had a high fever, sore throat and (brak przedimka) runny nose. I felt very weak, 'still want' (tego nie rozumiem) to sleep and I couldn't eat anything.

@Maciek,
my hair is very long and they get tangled up.
My mum always tells me so I put on a hat because it is very cold... JA BYM DAŁ 'to put on'
be ill. JA BYM ZMIENIŁ CZASOWNIK.

mom, mum - oba ok ale trzymaj się jednej formy.