Opowiadanie angielski

Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie tego opowiadania i poprawienie masy błędów zrobionych przez mnie oto on: (z góry dziękuje)

Unusual event
In last Friday in March, I and my friend Piotrek ride on cycle go to forest. The weather was hold and cloudy.
It looked at rain. We still have wish on travel on forest streeths.
After 2 hours we go to home, when ride over river. I saw body women, she found near riverside.
Piotrek call to Police, when I was looking at body. After 30 minutes were over river. As it happens it was dummy, which children throw for
river. They had 1st Day Spring.
On the end Police call to our parents. When they arrive on all event, they was informed that had happened.
After come back to home parents give me punishment. I was very thrill all event. I promise at I never in life call to Police.

Unusual event

On last Friday in March,my friend Piotrek and I ride our bicycles to go to the forest. The weather was (cold?) and cloudy.

It looked as though it might rain. WE still wished to travel on the forest trails. After two hours we were on our way home, when we rode over the river. (?) I saw the body of a woman. She was found near the riverside.

Piotrek called the police, whilest I was looking at the body. After thirty minutes the arrived at the river. As it happens, it was only a dummy, which the children threw in the river. They had had thier first day of Spring.

In the end the Police called my parents.....


Czy mogesz troche lepiej pisac, zebym ja wiedziala, co chcesz pisac? A potem bede mogla sprawdzic. Postaralam sie Ci pomoc, ale nie rozuniem co chcesz pisac.

,, When they arrive on all event, they was informed that had happened.
After come back to home parents give me punishment. I was very thrill all event. I promise at I never in life call to Police."

Jeżeli Ci to pomoże to moge napisać po polsku co miałem na myśli ale i tak bardzo dziekuje.

Kiedy oni przyjechali na to całe wydarzenie, poinformowali ich o całym zajściu.
Po powrocie do domu rodzice dali mi kare. Byłem bardzo przestraszony całym zajściem. Obiecałem sobie, że już nigdy w życiu nie zadzwonie po policje

...and I 'ride' (ride to czas teraz - opowiesc jest w przeszlosci - ride-czasow niereg) our bicycles to 'go'( niepotr) the forest.
... whilST I 'was looking' (simple wystarczy I looked) at the body. After
thirty minutes theY arrived at the river.
...had thEIR first day of Spring.

When they arriveD (czas przeszly) AT THE event, 'they' (l. mnoga) 'was' (l. poj)informed 'that' (WHAT) had happened.
After (kto? 'I') cAme back 'to' (bez 'to') home MY parents 'give' (czas przeszly -czas niereg 'gave') me MY punishment. I was very 'thrill' (sprawdz co to znaczy- to nie znaczy przestraszony) (about the whole event). I promiseD (czas przeszly) (komu? sobie to wtedy - myself) THat I WILL never in MY life call THE Police.

Hej. bardzo prosze o pomoc. mam na jutro napisac opowiadanie z angielskiego na dowolny temat. moglbym mi ktos pomoc i napisac jakeis opowiadanie? np o jakims wydarzeniu... opowiadanie jakies na 1 kartke b3. dziekuje i czekam na odpowiedz.

Może jeszcze do szkoły za Ciebie iść, co? Albo lepiej: życie za Ciebie przeżyć, bo tobie najwyraźniej się nic nie chce.

Mam prośbe czy mógłby mi ktoś sprawdzić opowiadanie? Tylko się ze mnie nie smiejcie, wiem że jest na bardzo niskim poziomie.

Task:napisz opowiadanie o nieoczekiwanym wydarzeniu, które miało miejsce podczas wycieczki zagranicznej i spowodowało twój wczesniejszy powrót do domu.

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Last summer I decided to spend holiday in Berlin with my best friend Tina. We were really excited because we hardly ever go abroad, so it was big event for us. Today we known that we couldn't have chosen a worse place for it. The advert about a trip I have found on the Inernet. The price was strange low but
When we got airport it turned out that we were not well prepared because Tina can not remebered in which posket of bag she had put the tickets. Luckily for us they hadn't checked our tisket before the entrance, the were not interested in our passports. One of them took and
'Do you realise that this people are looking for us ? ' Tina asked me. She was right. Immendately we took a taxi. The driver was looking for me all the time. I was feeling strang. When we got to hotel I can't believed in what I see. 'What is going on?' Tina asked nervously, ' I have bo idea' I answered. We have seen crowd of people around us. Within seconds we saw a photographer. After having been photographed by tens of papparazzi we have run to door but it was lock. While I had trying to open the door my bag fall down and opened showing everybod her inside. 'There is a gun !' some of crowd scream. It was suprised to see that. Then the papparazzi started do more photos. Next dy the police arrived and took us to command. If Tina, who knows the langue a little, hadn't been with me, I wouldn't even have understood what they wanted from me. It turned out that I looks like germany popstar Angela Geber and that's why paparazzi was interested in me. What is more they found my bags and I have been cleaned from objections of illegal properties of weabon. The oficcer has said that there will be better as we will leave because we can run to next trouble.
Now I know that it is neccessary to be aquainted with place which you want to see. Otherwise you can met a suprise.

przepraszam nie dokończyłam jednego zdania w 6 linijce dalej powino być one of them told us to enter on abroad.

Last summer I decided to spend MY holiday in Berlin with my best friend
Tina. We were really excited because we hardly ever go abroad, so it
was 'A' big event for us. Today we 'known' KNOW (czas teraz. bo piszesz 'today') that we couldn't have chosen a worse place for it. The advert 'about a' FOR THE trip I 'have' (niepotr) found on the InTernet.
The price was 'strange' (nie, nie tak - tutaj SURPRISINGLY low, but
when we got TO THE airport it turned out that we were not well prepared
because Tina 'can' DID not remebeR in which 'posket' POCKET of THE bag she had put the tickets. Luckily for us they hadn't checked our tiCketS before the
entrance, theY were not interested in our passports. One of them took
and...
'Do you realise that 'this' (this - odnosi sie do l. poj - a people to tutaj l. mn- THESE people are looking 'for' AT us?' Tina asked me.
ImmendIately we took a taxi. The driver was looking 'for me' (chyba AT ME all the time. I was feeling VERY strangE. When we got to THE hotel I 'can't' COULDN'T believE 'in' (niepotr) what I 'see' SAW. 'What is going on?' Tina asked nervously, ' I have No idea' I answered. We 'have seen' SAW A crowd of people around us.
After having been photographed by tens (OF THOUSANDS) of papparazzi we 'have run' RAN to THE door but it was lockED. While I 'had trying' TRIED to open the door my bag 'fall' FELL down and opened showing 'everybodY her inside' EVERYTHING INSIDE IT (bag to nie 'her'- to IT).
'There is a gun !' some of crowd screamED.
'It was suprised to see that' (tego zdania nie rozumiem).
Then the papparazzi started TO 'do' TAKE (you TAKE a photo) more photos. Next dAy the police arrived and took us to 'command' (zle slowo - to the station). If Tina, who knows the 'langue' (nie, nie tutaj LANGUAGE a little, hadn't been with me, I wouldn't even have understood what they wanted from me. It turned out that I lookED like 'germany' THE GERMAN popstar Angela Geber and that's why THE paparazzi was interested in me. What is more they found my bags and I have been 'cleaned' CLEARED from 'objections' ACCUSSATIONS of illegal 'properties' POSSESSION of A weaPon. The oficer has said that 'there' IT 'will' WOULD be better 'as' IF we 'will' (niepotr) leave because we can run INto 'next' MORE trouble.
Now I know that it is neccessary to be aquainted with THE place which you
want to see. Otherwise you can 'met' MEET a surprise.

na >>>Otherwise you can 'met' MEET a surprise.
lepiej...otherwise, you can get a (real) surprise.

wielkie dzięki. Nie spodziewałam się tak szybkiej odpowiedzi. Jeszcze raz dziękuje ;))

mam pytanie: ile dałabyś mi za to punktów na 18 mozliwych ? ;p

musze napisać opowiadanie na temat. "budzę się jako księżniczka.." no i jak to wykorzystam. Mógłby mi ktoś pomóc? :)

>>>musze napisać opowiadanie na temat. "budzę się jako księżniczka.." no
i jak to wykorzystam. Mógłby mi ktoś pomóc
Jak musisz to musisz, - a dlaczego tego nie zrobilas. Chyba nie czekasz, ze znajdzie sie ktos kto to za Ciebie zrobi. To naprawde bylby chyba szczyt.

no jak narazie mysle. chwilowo nie mam weny ;/

Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie tego opowiadania z góry bardzo dziękuję:
In my picture the colours are blue and yellow because they're very happy and calm also think thet I'm always quite and friendly.There's a photo of me in the centre of the picture.In the photo I'm with my best friend.My best activity is to meet with their friends.I think it's really cool.Kinga is my best friend who is a very crazy and funny.There are other people in my picture.You can see that I like people who are funny and friendly There are other places and objects in my picture.The picture is the placy where we often stay.You can see thet I'm tnterested in music.I think that I'm extroverted and cheerful person.

cześc! mam ogromną prosbe, napisałam prace o najlepszej mojej podróży ,ale prosiłabym by ja ktoś sprawdził.

I didn't visited many countries, but I was in a few amazing place in the world, (the)most in Europe. I remember (very funny) particulary one. It was about 5 years ago. I was writing mature and in free time was thinking about the longest summer in previous students life. I have thought- it will be my indescibable holiday, which I wanted spend with my friend Marta. We often have spoken about travelling.
On one occasion we met in her house and we spent all day for chose where, when, with who we want travel and we agreed full details for that. We decided to spend holiday in Berlin. We couldn't wait up for that trip, becouse we hardly work year-round and hardly ever go abroad. My parents told us that we couldn't have chosen a worse place ,,you can go to Italy, France, Also, Spain, but chose nearly Germany".We changed our decision coure.
IN first Sunday in july I and Marta caught a bus to the airport.We flew plane firstly,so mere flight was for us really exciting. When teh plane took off Marta felt bad and I was stresful too, but we tried to enjoy beautiful views through the plain window. At the end of nice stewardess informed us to remain steated, fasted your seatbelts and said about local time. Firstly we had to survive passport control, picked up our luggage, reached our hostel andafter we could celebration.
We came out the Heathrow Airport and were going to our hostel by metro.
Marta has sought our hostel before our trip, becouse she wanted cheap room with a bathroom (bathroom in room was very important).After we installed the ,,student hostel", left luggage and took a shower ,we found nearly pub, where we drunk once beer and met more natives. It was 10 o'clock when we came back to room and went to sleep. The reason for that was our plants on the next day (we were getting up early and were starting tours).
Next day we saw a Big Ben and London Eye, after we sailed by ship along the River Thames. Name of this ship was ,,London duck". In this ship we met fantastic group from Poland. During the sailed I was fastinated by Parlament and Marta approached to guide and discussed with him a few minutes. She back to me and told only,, we have group, we will not ourselves" and I was so angry at her, becouse maybe she didn't know how many problems therefore we could have. Consequently we have paid the guide to can visit some of his group.
However, remainder of the day was seamless, very funny and I grants we spent together a great adventure.
Also remaining days (5 days) we spent in exploring, but we were trying to keep each other with group from poland. Now,I think it was once, and I prefer to be the last time too.
We have visited wembley- national football stadium of England, many great museums with priceless exhibits (for example british Museum) and Madame Tussand's (where we can met famous people as wax figures). Also old markets and the biggest ,more clean green parks.
During those six day we had a good weather.every day was not too hot, the sun was shining. Only on Tuesday sudenly sky made dark, it began to thunder,flash, and then began to rain.The whole rest of day it was raining heavily.
Every evening we went (only two) to nearly ,befriended pub or to cinema.In pub we recognized London motto,which said that,, when the people is tried of london, he is tried of his life".Maybe it is true ,becouse during a fews days we saw little London ,but beautiful places,and when people doesn't enjoy fot live he doesn't see nothing. I want very much to go back there again, maybe in a future.
General I think travel is the best education. In addition to the knowledge of history you can met friendly p0eople from other country, you become more tolerant, you can gain unforgettable experience, learn good organization, organize your pocket money, lear how important is keep each other,and the most important- you creat memories,which you will remember forever.

I 'didn't' (zle, poczytaj o tym, tutaj HAVEN'T) visited many countries, but I was in a few amazing placeS (bo jak piszesz 'few' to chyba wiecej jak jeden) in the world, mostLY in Europe. I remember (przedimek) particularLY FUNNY one.
I was writing THE MaturA EXAM and in free time was thinking about the longest summer 'in previous students life' (cos tu nie tak) . I 'have' (niepotr) thought- it will be my indescibable holiday, which I wanted (brak slowa) spend with my friend Marta. We 'often have' (zla kol slwo) spoken about travelling.
On one occasion we met in her house and we spent all day 'for chose ' (zla czesc mowy) where, when, with whoM we want (brak slowa) travel and we agreed full details for that. We decided to spend 'holiday' (tu albo brakuje przedimka albo daj l. mn) in Berlin. We couldn't wait 'up' (nie, niepotr, 'wait up' znaczy cos innego) for that trip, 'becouse' (a to? cos to za slowo znalazl gdzies, popraw i nigdy wiecej nie pisz jego zle) we 'hardly work' (co to znaczy, ze nigdy nie opracujecie?) year-round and hardly ever go abroad. My parents told us that we couldn't have chosen a worse place ,,you can go to Italy, France, Also, Spain, but 'chose nearly' (a jak to moze byc 'nearly Germnay-tego nie rozumiem) Germany".We changed our decision 'coure' (ortog).
'IN' (ON (brak przedimka) first Sunday in 'july' (duza litera) 'I and Marta' (napisz Marta and I) caught a bus to the airport. 'We flew plane firstly' (nie, tutaj robisz kalki z polskiego, napisz tak...It was the first time that we would fly) so (brak przedimka) mere flight was for us really exciting. When 'teh' (ortog) plane took off Marta felt 'bad' (napisz ill) and I was 'stresful' (ortog) too, but we tried to enjoy (brak przedimka) beautiful views through the 'plain' (nie, nie ten wyraz, 'plain' znaczy cos innego, tutaj mowisz o 'plane') window. At the end (ale czego? musisz napisac) 'of' (niepotr (brak przedimka) nice stewardess 'informed' (zle slowo, tutaj ASKED) us to remain 'steated' (ortog), 'fasted' (ortog) your seatbelts and 'said' (zle, tutaj znowu kalka, napisz 'told us') about (brak przedimka) local time. Firstly we had to survive (brak przedimka) passport control, (ale kto? co? musisz napisac) picked up our luggage, reached our hostel and after (ale czego? musisz napisac) we could 'celebration' (zla czesc mowy).
We came out OF 'the' (niepotr) Heathrow Airport and were going to our hostel by metro.
Marta 'has' (niepotr) sought OUT our hostel before our trip, 'becouse' (napisz to poprawnie) she wanted (brak przedimka) cheap room with a bathroom ((brak przedimka) bathroom in (brak przedimka) room was very important). After we installed (ale co? siebie? musisz napisac) the ,,student hostel", (kto? musisz napisac) left (brak przedimka) luggage and took a shower ,we found (brak przedimka) 'nearly' (nie, to jest zle slowo, tutaj NEARBY) pub, where we drunk 'once' (nie, nie tak, tutaj ONE) beer and met more natives. It was 10 o'clock when we came back to (brak przedimka) room and went to sleep. The reason for that was our 'plants' (kwiatki? nie wiem gdzie one sie znalazly - popraw) 'on' FOR the next day (we were getting up early and were starting tours).
Next day we saw 'a' THE Big Ben and (brak przedimka) London Eye, after THAT we sailed by ship along the River Thames. Name of this ship was THE ,,London duck". In this ship we met (brak przedimka) fantastic group from Poland. During the 'sailed' SAIL I was fastinated by 'Parlament' (ortog) and Marta approached 'to' (niepotr ale brak przedimka) guide and 'discussed with him' (nie, to jest zle, napisz tutaj..had a discussion with him for) a few minutes. She (brak czasownika ) back to me and told ME THAT 'only,, we have group, we will not ourselves" ' (tego nie rozumiem) and I was so angry at her, 'becouse' (nie pisz tego blednie, bo zaczne krzyczec...) maybe she didn't know how many problems' therefore we could have' (nie rozumiem tego). Consequently we 'have' (niepotr) paid the guide 'to can visit' (tego nie rozumiem) some of his group.
However, (brak przedimka) remainder of the day was seamless, very funny and I 'grants' (cos tu nie tak, to jest zle slowo) we spent together a great adventure.
Also (brak przedimka) remaining days (5 days) we spent in exploring, but we were trying to keep 'each other' (nie rozumiem tego) with group from 'poland' (duza litera, to jest nazwa Panstwa). Now,I think it was once, and I prefer to be the last time too.- (cos nie za bardzo rozumiem o co tu chodzi)
We 'have' (niepotr) visited 'wembley' (duza litera)- (brak przedimka) National football stadium of England, many great museums with priceless exhibits (for example (brak przedimka) 'british' (duza litera-nazwa wlasna) Museum) and Madame 'Tussand's' (ortog) (where we 'can' COULD 'met' (tutaj czas przeszly, bo to minelo juz) famous people as wax figures). Also (tu cos brakuje) old markets and the biggest (ale co? musisz napisac) ,more clean green parks.
During those six dayS we had 'a' (niepotr) good weather.every day was not too hot, the sun was shining. Only on Tuesday 'sudenly' (ortog) (brak przedimka) sky 'made' (kalka z polskiego - napisz 'became') dark, it began to thunder, flash, and then began to rain.The whole rest of (brak przedimka) day it was raining heavily.
Every evening we went (only two) to (brak przedimka) 'nearly' (zle slowo, tutaj NEARBY) ,befriended pub or to (brak przedimka) cinema.In (brak przedimka) pub we recognized (brak przedimka) London motto,which said that"when the people 'is' (ale people to l. mnoga, dostosuj czasownik) tried of 'london' (duza litera), he is 'tried' (to jest zle slowo-popraw) of his life".Maybe it is true ,'becouse' (kochanie, bo bede niegrzeczna) during a 'fews' (ortog) days we saw little OF London ,but beautiful places,and when people 'doesn't' (tutaj inaczej...don't) enjoy 'fot' (co to za slowo-popraw) live he doesn't see 'nothing' ANYTHING. I want very much to go back there again, maybe in 'a' THE future.
GeneralLY, I think travel is the best education. In addition to the knowledge of history you can 'met' (tutaj czas teraz) friendly people from other 'country' COUNTRIES, you become more tolerant, you can gain unforgettable experience, learn good organization SKILLS, organize your pocket money, 'lear' (ortog) how important IT is TO 'keep' (zle slowo) each other, and the most important- you 'creat' (ortog) memories,which you will remember forever.

Przeczytaj, ile razy napisalam (brak przedimka) - musisz to pokonac i sie nauczyc.

dziekuje dziekuje bardzo ...a przyimki dobrze że choc zdaje sobie sprawe że to moją pięta achillesowa

witam :) moglby ktos byc taki dobry i sprawdzic mi moj opis czy nie ma bledow???:) z gory bardzo dziekuje:)
temat opowiadania: "a fortune mistake"

Once I was in Spain during my summer holidays. It was a camp and I had a lot of friends there. The place was beautiful, it was named Lloret De Mar. The weather was nice nearly every day. In the middle of my stay there was a trip to Barcelona organised. I had been always fascinated by the spanish culture. The night before I couldn’t sleep and I felt something strange that could happen in the future. However that trip was too important for me and I didn’t want to resign.
When we were on the spot I was totally shocked how amazing Barcelona was. After visiting the last place which was The Gaudi’s Park we went to the underground station. Before departure I wanted to buy something to drink. I went to the nearest shop and I thought that my group was waiting for me. When I came back, I saw nobody from my camp. I was frightened becouse the map of the underground was too complicated for me. Finally, I chose a wrong way.
While I was going and crying, I suddenly noticed a golden Rolex watch on the ground. It was the most beautiful watch I had ever seen. I took it to the pocket but after a few minutes somebody shouted: "Has anybody seen my Rolex?!" I looked around and I saw a young businessman,I answered: "I have", businessman said: "very thanks". I wanted to be an honest person so I gave that expensive watch back to him. He let me phone my group. When they were found that buisnessman gave me a cheque for 10000$ as a gift. I couldn’t believe that but it was true.
When I came back home, I told my family and friends about it. It was an unbelievable event. Money were very helpful. I could buy a new car and I am still in contact with that man...
I have never forgotten about it.

"a fortunATe mistake" (przepisuj uwaznie)

It was AT a camp and I had a lot of friends there.
I had 'been always' (zla kol slow) fascinated by the 'spanish' (duza litera) culture.
After visiting the last place which was The Gaudi’s Park we went to the (nie wiem czy jest jedna jedyna, czy masz na mysli jedna z wielu) underground station.
When I came back, I saw 'obody' (to jest zle, i pamietaj, I DID NOT SEE ANYBODY -nikogo nie widzialem) from my camp. I was frightened 'becouse' (a to, co to niby jest za slowo, popraw i nigdy wiecej nie pisz tego tak) the map of the underground was too complicated for me.
I 'took' PUT it 'to the' INSIDE MY pocket but after a few minutes somebody shouted: "Has anybody seen my Rolex?!"
(brak przedimka, juz mniw wk...pisac o tym samym caly czas - ludzie nauczcie sie tych przedimkow)) businessman said: "'very thanks' (to jest zle, poszukaj jak to sie mowi i napisz poprawnie)".
Whgen they were found that 'buisnessman' (ortog) gave me a cheque for 10000$ as a gift. I couldn’t believe that but it was ALL true.
(brak przedimka) money 'were' WAS very helpful.

big thx za pomoc:)

czy mogł by mi teraz ktos sprawdzic?:)

--Once I was in Spain during my summer holidays. It was at a camp and I had a lot of friends there. The place was beautiful, it was named Lloret De Mar. The weather was nice nearly every day. In the middle of my stay there was a trip to Barcelona organised. I had always been fascinated by the Spanish culture.
--When we were on the spot I was totally shocked how amazing Barcelona was. Before departure I wanted to buy something to drink. I went to the nearest shop and I thought that my group was waiting for me. When I came back,I DID NOT SEE ANYBODY from my camp. I was frightened because the map of the underground was too complicated for me. Finally, I chose a wrong way.
--I walked, I suddenly noticed a golden Rolex watch on the ground. I took it to the pocket. I looked around and I saw a young businessman. After a few minutes somebody shouted:
- "Has anybody seen my Rolex?!"
- "I have",I answered:,
-" You've found my watch",businessman said,
-"Please, you take a watch",I said,
-"very thanks",businessman said,
He let me phone my group. When they were found that buisnessman gave me a cheque for 10000$ as a gift. I couldn’t believe that but it was ALL true.
--When I came back home, I told my family and friends about it. It was an unbelievable event. The money was very helpful. I could buy a new car and I am still in contact with that man...
I have never forgotten about it.

http://zadane.pl/zadanie/278796
to nie jest Twoja praca.

a i temat to "A Fortune Mistake" a NIE "a fortunate mistake"!!!!

to jest moja praca

sprawdz to

znaczenie obu tematow jest podobne

Nie rób z nas głupków, dobrze? Praca, którą dałeś 'do sprawdzenia' trzy dni temu została wczesniej opublikowana na innych serwerach. Terri - zawsze sprawdzaj, czy ktoś nas nie nabiera.