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I have always been interested in journalism. It is the opportunity to be creative, to play with words and describe the world around that attracts me. But the most important aspect is having a chance to write about things that are forgotten or not given enough attention, but are in fact really important and definitely worth reading and knowing about. As a journalist one can make others think about those issues, make them aware of certain facts and it is amazing.
I would like to combine my interest in journalism with my true passion, which is music, and work as a music journalist after my studies. I am fascinated with how a few sentences plus a few sounds can change people’s moods, feelings, even view on certain things in millions of ways; with how strongly the music we love can appeal to us and influence us. Analising the history of music, realising how one band, one group of talented people can affect successive generations of musicians and fans is a wonderful adventure. As a music fiend, I also learn to play the guitar, not only for pleasure, but also in order to be able to understand it better from the technical point of view.
Studying in Great Britain would be a great experience for me. I have always enjoyed learning foreign languages as well as getting to know other cultures and customs. At the moment I am studying English Philology at University in Gdansk, where I learn the German language as well. I hope my dream about studying abroad will come true and I will do my best to make the most of it.
..with words and TO describe the world around that attracts me.
...worth reading and knowing about (subjective opinion).
As a journalist one can make others think about 'those issues' (the issues such as....), make 'them' (people) aware of certain facts 'and it is amazing' (which maybe truly amazing).
As a music 'fiend', I also 'learn to' (know how to) play the guitar, not only ..
..where I AM learnING the German language as well.

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