Sprawdzenie pracy....bardzo proszę!!!!

Na wtorek mam mieć opis swojego najlepszego lub najgorszego dnia w życiu z użyciem przysłówków i przymiotników. Wiem, że zawsze jak coś pisze to zrobię masę błędów, dlatego jak ktoś może rzucić okiem i poprawić będę bardzo wdzięczny.


Sometimes in our life we have a day which we called the worst day in our life.The situations are really unlucky and bad for us so we hate this day. In this text I will describe the worst day in my life.
These day the sun wasn't very shining when i went up. I was gradually thinking properly after long dream. I looked on my clock it was showing 8:23. I went fast to took a shower and i almost killed myself when i was going sleepy downstairs. After this i knowed it will not be very good they. I started scrub my body with a shampoo becasue my shower gel had went out. Obviously I must rinsed with cold water because my heating stove broke down. Then i went to the church. When i was at half of my way it started raining i was very angry. Apparently i arrived to late becasue there were no one in the church. I need to wait for next mass. After that i went to media markt to bought some stuff for my computer but of course MM was closed. Than i went back to my home. I was watching tv when phone rang. That was my father he said that he would be late becasue on his construcion area was an accident and he must went to the hospital with injured worker. When i stoped watching tv my mother with my sister went back home. They were very angry becasue my mother had the accident when he was driving to home.I coulndn't stop thinking about what happened these day. After all i came to my bed and foll asleep.
Obviously I will never forgott this day. These situtions are really true and after 2 years i cant believe that happened to me. I hate when it happes again.

Sometimes in our life we have a day which we called the worst day in our life.The situations are really unlucky and bad for us so we hate this day. In this text I will describe the worst day in my life.
These day the sun wasn't very shiny when i went up. I was gradually thinking properly after long dream. I looked on my clock it was showing 8:23. I went fast to took a shower and i almost killed myself when i was going sleepy downstairs. After this i knew it will not be very good day. I started scrub my body with a shampoo becasue my shower gel had went out. Obviously I must rinsed with cold water because my heating stove broke down. Then i went to the church. When i was at half of my way it started rain i was very angry. Apparently i arrived to late becasue there were no one in the church. I need to wait for next mass. After that i went to media markt to bought some stuff for my computer but of course MM was closed. Than i came back to my home. I was watching tv when phone rang. That was my father he said that he would be late becasue on his construcion area was an accident and he must went to the hospital with injured worker. When i stoped watching tv my mother with my sister went back home. They were very angry becasue my mother had an accident when he was driving to home.I coulndn't stop thinking about what happened these day. After all i came to my bed and foll asleep.
Obviously I will never forgott this day. These situtions are really true and after 2 years i cant believe that happened to me. I hate when it happens again.

Troche lepsza wersja bardzo prosze o sprawdzenie.

Sometimes in our life we have a day which we 'called' CAN CALL the worst day in
our life.
ThIS day the sun wasn't very shiny when I 'went' GOT up. I was gradually
(coming round) ANF thinking properly after A long dream. I looked on my clock AND it was showing 8:23. I 'went fast' QUICKLY took a shower and I almost killed myself when 'i' (I piszemy wielka litera i to zawsze - nawet w srodku zdania) was going sleepy downstairs. After this I knew THAT it 'will' WOULD not be A very good day. I started scrubBING my body with a shampoo becaUSE my
shower gel had 'went' RUN out. 'Obviously' (moze lepsze slowo byloby UNFORTUNATELY I 'must rinsed' HAD TO RINSE with cold water because my heating 'stove' SYSTEM broke down.
When I was 'at half of my way' ABOUT HALF WAY it started TO rain AND I was very angry. Apparently I arrived toO late becaUSE there 'were' WAS no one in the church. I needED to wait for THE next Mass. After that I went to media markt to 'bought' BUY some stuff for my computer, (przed but dajemy przecienk) but of course MM was closed. Than I came back 'to my' (niepotr) home. I was watching THE tv when THE phone rang. 'That' IT was my father AND he said that he would be late 'becasue' BECAUSE on his construcTion 'area' SITE THERE was an accident
and he must 'went' GO to the hospital with THE injured worker. When I stoPped
watching tv my mother with my sister 'went' CAME back home. They were very
angry 'becasue' (popraw to because) my mother had an accident when She was driving 'to' (Niepotr) home.I couldn't stop thinking about what HAD happened 'these' ON THIS day. After all I came to my bed and 'foll' FELL asleep.
Obviously I will never 'forgott' FORGET (czas przeszly) this day. These situtions 'are' WERE really true and after 2 years I can't believe that THEY HAD happened to me. I WOULD hate IT 'when' IF IT WERE TO happen again.

Nie wiem co mi się stało z tym because. Wielkie dzięki widzę, że sporo błędów narobiłem. Nie wiem tylko o co chodzi:
I was gradually (coming round) ANF thinking properly after A long dream.

sorry, tam powinno byc
I was gradually coming round TO thinking properly after a long dream.
Coming round - przychodzic do siebie po snie

Wielkie dzięki, dobra robota :D