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Musiałam napisać story w czterech czasach przeszłych pas simple, past continous, past perfect simple i past perfect continous. Proszę sprawdzić czy są tam jakieś błędy, będę bardzo wdzięczna.
It was very hot and sunny summer. I was going back home with my family when it happened. Everything was just perfect until that day. We were just an ordinary family in our return journey. It was about 11.00 pm and we hadn’t seen any car for few hours. We were listening ‘trójki’ as usually and then suddenly we hit something. The car stopped. We knew it had to be something really big like a wild boar or a deer. My dad got out and touched his head. He was terrified. After a while he got back to the car. He didn’t say a word. Then, after few minutes, he spoke: family, we have run over a man, but that’s not all, he has his throat slit. We couldn’t call the police. They would think, that we have run over him at first and then slit the throat.
It was obvious that we had to do something with the body. Now I would just runaway but that time we were too frightened to just leave the body. The police would find us somehow and put us in jail. We decided to bury the body in the wood near our home town. It was the nearest forest in this area. My father had a camp shovel in his boot which we used. We were digging a few hours and after that we went home. Next day our mother woke us up. She bought the newspaper and showed us an article about a hunt next day. It would be nothing special but the hunters were planning to use dogs and hunt in our forest-the same we were in last night. After a while we sat in our car and were going for the body. Once more we were frightened to death. We had a problem with finding the body. We buried it when it was still dark and in the day time the forest looked different. My sister was crying, my dad was furious. Me and my mum were the only calm people at that moment. We weren’t calm at all, we were just to frightened to think or to do something. Bu we knew that if we didn’t find the body, the dogs would. Fortunately the ground was still fresh after night digging and we found the body. We took it to the boot one more time. The body was decaying and stinking. None of us had done anything against the law before but that day we were determined and ready for everything. I suggested chopping and slicing the body and putting it in the trash bags. Then we could get rid of it throwing it out. No one else had an idea and this one sounded for us quite easy to realize. Somebody could think that we had been cannibals or something like that at the time. But for us the body was just a thing. Our safety and inner peace was the most important thing for us that time. After we had quartered the … the thing, we took it with us and threw the first bag into the street dustbin. It was an ordinary activity: a man was throwing the rubbish. Nobody asks why and what. Only one small homeless dog came to the dustbin and started to sniff. Fuck that dog. I had to take back the bag. The stupid animal would ruin everything. The plan wasn’t perfect. There was only one thing we could do and we should have done it earlier. The body was one big peace of meat so we can just sell it. Certainly nobody would buy a human body. Mincing the body would do. We bought 4 mincers and started our work in cellar. We packed the meat into small plastic bags like those in supermarkets. The blood was almost everywhere, our dog was eating the meat and even my mother suggested eating it for supper. It was a sick idea but nobody thought like that at the time. After a few hours we had 96 pounds of meat and it was too much to just sell it at butcher’s. It wasn’t a problem as I had another perfect idea. We wrote date on the bags and threw them away. The meat was to old to eat according to the date written on it. Now everything was perfect. Nobody would ask about old meat in dustbin. After that we went back home. Now we could rest. Since that time I hate meat. I have no respect for human life. For me it’s just a big peace of meat.
Trochę scarry-,
Though bardzo ciekawa historyjka.
A few fixes needed, but don't worry, we all do make mistakes.
:)
scary
Przed 'but' dajemy przecinki.
I was 'going back home' (tutaj mozna ..returning home) with..
We were listening 'trójki' (to Station 3?) as usuaL and then...
After a while he got back INto the car. Then, after A few minutes, he spoke: 'family' (moze lepiej ...Listen everyone..), we have run over a man, but that's not all, he has his throat slit.
..that we 'have run over him' (ran him over) at first and then slit 'the' HIS throat.
Now I would just run away (2 slowa, runaway-to cos innego), but AT that time we were too frightened to just leave the body.
We 'were digging' DUG FOR a few hours (buried the body?) and after that we went home.
She bought 'the' A newspaper and showed us an article about a hunt THE next day.
..hunters were planning to use dogs and hunt in our forest-the same ONE we
were in last night.
After a while we sat in our car and (intended going?) were going for the body. 'Me and my mum' (My mum and I) were the only calm people at that moment. ..
was still fresh after THE night digging and we found the body.
(Tutaj mozna.. We used a chainsaw to quarter the body) After we had quartered the ... the thing,
It was JUST an ordinary activity: a man was throwing OUT the rubbish.
We bought 4 (large?)mincers and started our work in THE cellar.
The meat was toO old to eat according to the date written on it.
Since that time I hate (eating?(any?)meat.
The best story I've read for a while.
>It was {a} very hot and sunny summer. I was going back home with my
>family when {this} happened. Everything {had} just {been} perfect until that day.
>We were just an ordinary family in our return journey. It was about
>11.00 pm and we hadn't seen any car for {a} few hours. We were listening {to}
>{'Radio Three'/'Trojka'} as {usual,} and then suddenly we hit something. The car
>stopped. We knew {that} it {must have been} something really big like a wild boar or
>a deer. My dad got out and touched his head. He was terrified. After a
>while, he got back {into} the car. He didn't say a word. Then, after {a} few
>minutes, he spoke, {"Listen everyone,} we have run over a man, but that's not all,
>he {has had} his throat slit." We couldn't call the police. They would {have thought}
>that we {ran}{him} over at first and then slit the throat.
>It was obvious that we had to do something with the body. Now, I would
>just run away but that time we were too frightened to just leave the
>body. The police would {have}{found} us somehow and put us in jail. We decided
>to bury the body in the wood near our home town. It was the nearest
>forest in this area. My father had a {hand} shovel in {the} boot which we
>used. We {had been} digging a few hours {before} we went home. {The} next
>day our mother woke us up. She {had} bought {a} newspaper and showed us an
>article about {an animal} hunt {taking place the} next day. It would {have been} nothing special but the
>hunters were planning to use dogs and hunt in our forest - the same we
>were in {the previous} night. After a while, we {were sitting} in our car and were going for
>the body. Once {again,} we were frightened to death. We had a problem with
>finding the body. We {had} buried it when it {had} still {been} dark, and in the day
>time the forest looked different. My sister was crying, my dad was
>furious. {My mum and I} were the only calm people at that moment. {Actually,} we
>weren't calm at all, we were just {too} frightened to think or to do
>something. {But} we knew that if we didn't find the body, the dogs would.
>Fortunately, the ground was still fresh after {that night's} digging and we
>found the body. We {put} it {into} the boot {again}. The body was
>decaying and {stank}. None of us had done anything against the law
>before but that day we were determined and ready for {anything}. I
>suggested chopping and slicing the body and putting it in the {rubbish}
>bags. Then we could {have}{got} rid of {the body} throwing it out. No one else had an
>idea and this one sounded quite easy {for us} to {achieve}. Somebody could
>think that we {were} cannibals or something like that at the time.
>But for us the body was just a thing. Our safety and inner peace {were}
>the most important {things} for us that time. After we had quartered the
>... the thing, we took it with us and threw the first bag into {a}
>street dustbin. It was an ordinary activity: a man {} throwing {}
>rubbish. Nobody asks why and what. Only one small homeless dog came {up} to
>the dustbin and started to sniff. Fuck that dog. I had to take back
>the bag. The stupid animal {might}{have}{ruined} everything. The plan wasn't
>perfect. There was only one thing we could do and we should have done
>it earlier. The body was one big {piece} of meat so we {couldn't} just sell it.
>Certainly nobody would {have}{bought} a human body. {"Mincing the body would do," I thought to myself.} We
>bought {four} mincers and started our work in {the} cellar. We packed the meat
>into small plastic bags like those in supermarkets. The blood was
>almost everywhere, our dog was eating the meat and even my mother
>suggested eating it for supper. It was a sick idea but nobody thought
>like that at the time. After a few hours, we had 96 pounds of meat and
>it was too much to just sell it {to}{a butcher's}. {That} wasn't a problem as I
>had another perfect idea. We wrote {a} date on the bags and threw them
>away. The meat was {too} old to eat according to the date written on {the bags}.
>Now everything was perfect. Nobody would ask about old meat in {a}
>dustbin. After that we went back home. Now we could rest. Since that
>time I {have}{hated} meat. I have no respect for human life. For me it's just a
>big {piece} of meat.
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