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It was dark and stromy night. John went out home. He had meeting with friend in new pub. He was walking wery quickly by road witch was light by moon. Suddendly he heard sound of his mobile phone. Strange send to him message that somebody come to him at 24.00 o'clock. He felt that something terrible must happend, his heart was getting beat wery quickly. When he look at his wath point 24.59. John saw that something come to him. It was person with white face from who John felt could. This person said to him;"You hawe something which belong to me". He was terrified and try run away but mysteriously strenght didn't let him run . Next day his body was found by man who went to work. Section his body show that John haven't heart.

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Prosze, niech mi ktoś choć udzieli wskazówek co zmienić...

It was a dark and stormy night. John left home. He was having a meeting with a friend in a new pub. He was walking very quickly along the road which was lit by the moonlight. Suddenly, he heard the sound of his mobile phone ringing. A stranger has sent a message to him about that somebody was coming to see him at 12 o'clock at midnight. He felt that something terrible was going to happen. His heart was beginning to beat very quickly. It was 11.59 when John was looking at his watch. John could see a figure approaching him. It was a person with a white face. This person said to him, 'You have something which belongs to me.' John was terrified and tried to run away, but mysteriously we couldn't make a single move.
The next day John's body was found by a man going to work. The autopsy revealed that he didn't have a heart.

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