PROSZE O SPRAWDZENIE - Memo

Witam, Jestem zupełnie lewy z angielskiego więc prosze o pomoc. Poniżej zadanie oraz moja odpowiedz. Czy 40 marks to znaczy 40 słów? Bo mało mi sie to wydaje.



Zadanie:

Write on ONE of the following options:

Setting


You work at the Head Office of Peerless Commodities, Claremorris, County Mayo, Ireland. Here is a
transcript of a telephone conversation that you had today with Mrs Bridget Molloy, the Administrative
Manager:

Mrs Molloy Hello. Will you write a memo to all the staff at Head Office, please?
I should have written it earlier, but I have been delayed at our branch in Drogheda.
You Of course I shall, Mrs Molloy. What is the message?

Mrs Molloy Well, as you know, we have recently appointed a new Public Relations Officer, Miss
Maureen Flavell ... No, I’m sorry ... It’s not Flavell ...It’s Flaherty. I’ll spell her name:
F...L...A...H...E...R...T...Y.

You Yes, I met her after the interview.

Mrs Molloy She is coming next week to visit Peerless Commodities to look around our factory and
offices. She wants to get some ideas of what may interest the newspapers, TV
companies, magazines ... things that will be good publicity for us.
She will visit on Tuesday. She’ll arrive in the morning, at about 10 o’clock. Can you
make certain that there is a car parking space reserved for her?
You When does she begin her job?

Mrs Molloy Oh, it’s not for another 6 weeks, but she wants to make plans before she officially
starts. Will you show her around on Tuesday? Be her guide and introduce her to staff.
She wants to talk with as many people as possible and to get ideas from them for
possible publicity.

Write the memo and warn staff to expect the visit. It will be completely informal.


Task
Write the memo.
(40 marks)









Moja odpowiedz:



MEMO


To: All the staff at Head Office


From: Mr Mateusz Nawara, Office Manager


Subject: Visit new Public Relations Officer


Date: 16.09.2008


In next week we expect visit new Public Relations Officer, Miss Maureen Flaherty. This will be informall visit but You should be prepare. She will be search new materiales for media. She begin on Tusday, in the morning, at about 10 o’clock. I will be her introduce and I introduce her to You. I expects several things from You:

• You must prepare anwers to her questions.
• Reserve parking space for Miss Flaherty


Please, don`t convene me, this is very inportant for company.

dotrało do mnie :) marks to punkty

prosze więc tylko o sprawdzenie, opinie ile powinno być słów w memo, i ewentualnie co moge jeszcze napisać

ponawiam prośbe- to dla mnie bardzo ważne

(40 marks odnosi sie do punktow ktore mozna dostac za to zadanie)

Date: 16.09.2008
'In' DURING next week we expect A visit FROM THE new Public Relations Officer, Miss Maureen Flaherty. This will 'be' (lepiej...have the form of) AN 'informall'(ortog) visit, but 'You' (co jest z tym 'you' - dlaczego uzywasz wielkiej litery? 'you w srodku zdania piszemy mala litera) should be WELL prepareD.
She will be REsearchING new materiales for (tu cos brakuje - for inclusion in the) media.
She (a co sie stalo z WILL?) begin on 'Tusday' (ej? - popraw), in the morning, at about 10 o'clock.
'I will be her introduce' (co to ma znaczyc?...I will be HER GUIDE and I WILL (dlaczego zapominasz o 'will?) introduce her to 'You' (j/w).
'I 'expects' (expects odnosi sie do 3os.l.poj - to dlaczego tak mowisz o sobie - I EXPECT)a several things from you:' (powiem Ci, ze jakby ktos tak napisal do mnie to dostalby ...lepiej...I would be grateful, if you would assist her by:

>• 'You must' (nie pisz tego) 'preparING 'anwers' (ortog)' (mozna ...answering all her questions to the best of your ability) to her questions.
>• reservING A parking space for Miss Flaherty
> ...Please arrange for as many people to be present as possible.(Dlaczego tego nie napisales?)

Please, don`t 'convene me' (nawet tego nie rozumiem - o co tu chodzi?), this is very inportant for THE company.

wielkie dzięki :)