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All eighteen year olds should do national service.

Everyone agrees that military service is a very important matter. However, not everyone agrees about the best way to instruct people: should they all do this, or only men? Only who’re not studying? over eighteen or over twenty one?

There are several advantages to common military service for eighteen year olds. Firstly, it’s in favour of gender equality, furthermore, it proclaims ideas of unity and community. Secondly, many people think that it is the only way to teach teenagers many values like: patriotism, honor, courage, prowess; many people are sure that it’s irreplaceable unit of real(every) men live. Finally, supporters of military service also believe that eighteen years olds don’t even have anything to do.

However there are many arguments against common military service for eighteen year olds. Firstly, it makes people more aggressive, insensitive. This is because it changes anyone forever , means: behavior, perspectives, and many other. But perhaps the biggest disadvantage is that people mostly thing that the armed forces is not a place for women. Finally, if any country will start to instruct al their human society it can (doprowadzić do wojny).
In conclusion, national service is necessary, but not everybody is made for to serve their country, so it could be hard for many people to do their national service, even for eighteen years olds, they’re so young, i thing, to young maybey.
However, not everyone agrees about the best way to instruct people:
should they all 'do this' (ale do czego to sie odnosi?), or only men? Only 'who're' (napisz to w calosci- to nic nie znaczy) not studying? over
eighteen or over twenty one?

There are several advantages to 'common' (zle slowo- poszukaj inne) military service for eighteen (mozesz napisac 18-year) year olds. Firstly, 'it's' (ale CO?) in favour of gender equality, furthermore, it proclaims ideas of unity and community. Secondly, many people think that it is the only way to teach teenagers many values like: patriotism, honor, courage, prowess. (nowe zdanie)- Many people are sure that it's AN irreplaceable unit of real men 'live' (po pierwsze tutaj masz czasownik a potrzeba rzeczownika, a po drugie ma byc l. mnoga bo napisales 'men'). Finally, supporters of military service also believe that eighteen years olds don't 'even' (niepotr) have anything to do.
However there are many arguments against 'common' (zle slowo) military service for eighteen year olds. Firstly, it makes people more aggressive AND insensitive. This is because it changes anyone forever , AND THAT means:
behavior, perspectives, 'and many other' (np Co? mam zgadywac..musisz napisac) But perhaps the biggest disadvantage is that people mostly 'thing' (zle slowo-napisz poprawne) that the armed forces 'is' ARE (dlatego, ze forces-to l.mnoga) not a place for women. Finally, if any country 'will start' STARTS to 'instruct' (nie za bardzo to slowo-poszukaj inne) alL their 'human' (niepotr) society it can (doprowadzić do wojny- LEAD TO WAR).
In conclusion, national service is necessary, but not everybody is
made 'for' (niepotr) to serve their country, so it could be hard for many people
to do their national service, even for eighteen years olds, they're so
young, 'i' (I zawsze piszemy duza litera) 'thing' (zle slowo-popraw), 'to' (ortog) young 'maybey' (ortog).
(Mozesz dodac, ze chociaz sami sie uwazaja za doroslych, to jeszcze sa dziecmi)
dziekuję :) ale nie zdarzyłem poprawić przed oddaniem, szkoda ze teog nie zauwazylem wczoraj :(

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