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Now, in the twenty first century, when borders in Europe don't exist and people have a possibility to travel around the world, English has become the second most popular language. Speaking English gives you a lot of opportunities like to get a good job or to live abroad.
For people who are traveling a lot, especially to foreign countries, speaking English is a very helpful ability. More than 2 billion people are speaking this language so you can easily communicate with everyone all over the world.
Nowadays everyone who wants to get a well paid job needs to know at least one foreign language. Person who speaks English will get promotion faster and earn more than an employee who doesn't. Also many young people have found new, better jobs abroad, mainly in the United Kingdom. For those who were speaking English finding job was much easier.
Today many music artists are singing in English language so even when we are relaxing and listening to their songs, we are able to check what they are singing about.
In these days the Internet is the biggest source of information. We can find there everything but we have to know how to look for it. Over 85% of websites are written in English and in relation to analysis of the Internet informations which are on English websites are the most valuable and the most often updating.
I think that English language is very important, especially for people who want to achieve something in their life.

Byłbym bardzo wdzięczny za sprawdzenie tej pracy. Jest dla mnie ważna.

no dobra, tak pobieznie:

twenty first
to sie nie pisze z dashem?

opportunities like to get a good job
to jest na pewno dobrze?

2 billion people are speaking
a czemu nie present simple?

well paid job
ja wole well-paid

Person who speaks English

przedimek\

For those who were speaking English
czemu past cont?

music artists
musicians?

informations

niepoliczalny rzecz!

the most often updating.
nie ten imieslow

I think that English language is very important

przedimek

Dziękuje

English gives you a lot of opportunities like getting a better job or living abroad.

For people who travel a lot, especially to foreign countries, speaking English is a very helpful skill.

Someone who speaks English will get a promotion faster and earn more money than an employee who doesn't speak any foreign language.

Today many musicians are singing in English so even when we are relaxing and listen to their songs, we know what they are singing about.


These days the Internet is the biggest source of information.

valuable and the most recently updated.

>to sie nie pisze z dashem?

a nie z hyphenem?

>>to sie nie pisze z dashem?
>
>a nie z hyphenem?

napewno z hyphenem - w druku 'hyphen' jest zawsze dwa razy krotszy od dasha, natomiast w pismie ma zazwyczaj taka sama dlugosc, i wowczas moze sprawiac komus problem w odroznieniu i poprawnym nazwaniu tego znaku interpunkcyjnego

Now, in the 'twenty first' 21ST century, when borders in Europe don't exist and people have a possibility to travel around the world, English has become the second most popular language. (ale nie piszesz ktory jest 'first' - tu zaraz pada takie pytanie)
Seaking English gives you a lot of opportunities 'like' (dale j nie rozumiem dlaczego to slowo jest uzywane w ten sposob - poszukaj inne) to get a good job or to live abroad.
For people who 'are traveling' TRAVEL a lot, especially to foreign countries, speaking English is a very helpful ability. More than 2 billion people 'are speaking' SPEAK this language so you can easily communicate with everyone all over the world.
(brakuje przedimka) person who speaks English will get (brakuje przedimka) promotion faster and earn more than an employee who doesn't (doesn't WHAT). For those who 'were speaking' SPOKE English finding (brakuje przedimka) job was much easier.
Today many music artists 'are singing' SING in (brakuje przedimka) English language so even when we are relaxing and listening to their songs, we are able to 'check' (zle slowo) what they are singing about.
Over 85% of websites are written in English and in relation to (brakuje przedimka) analysis of the Internet 'informations' (co to za slowo jest - popraw) which are on English websites are the most valuable and the 'most often updating' (pomysl o tym- to jest zle).