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Nowadays, a lot of people who are film stars, singers or sports stars are very popular and famous in the world. They, like ordinary poeople have chlidren, who must live with famous parents and their career.The question is whether this phenomeon has only positive or it is a negative. This is what I am going discuss in the following paragraphs.
Nowadays, a lot of 'people who are' (wg mnie niepotr) film stars, singers or sports stars are very popular and famous 'in' (daj to inaczej...all over) the world. They, like ordinary poeople have chlidren, who 'must live' (to mi sie nie podoba, bo wiele dzieci nie zyje z matkami/ojcami - daj to inaczej) with famous parents and their career .The question is whether 'this phenomeon' (ale nie napisalas o co chodzi - o to ze dzieci zyja z rodzicami?) has only positive or 'it is a negative' (nie rozumiem tego. Co ma byc negative? zycie z rodzicami?). 'This' (ale co? musisz napisac wyrazniej) is what I am going discuss 'in the following paragraphs' (mozna napisac 'below').

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