proszę o sprawdzenie

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Proszę o sprawdzenie tej krótkiej historyjki. Dawno nie miałam kontaktu z językiem i mam wrażenie że to jest w "kali mówić" :( Z góry dziękuję za wszystkie uwagi.
It was beautiful spring. Sky was like ice cream. The sun was shining brighter. John fall in love. He has a big problem because his chosen was much higher. She was his neighbour. She was alone, her husband died last year. John followed his neighbour day and night. She can't escape, he was very devious. Time flied by. He felt embarrassed when she ignored him. He can't wear it longer. He decided declare his love. He cuddled her in a lift. She turned away. He cuddled her tighter and when they were very close he whispered: I love You.
proszę ;( pilnie mi to potrzebne
;(((( HELPPPPPP
nie wiem :D
hej przyślij mi swojego maila to postaramy się to poprawić
kurczeeeee nikomu nie chce się looknąć????????? plisss
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