Rozprawka

Hej. Czy mógłby mi ktoś sprawdzić i poprawić błędy w mojej rozprawce?
Temat to:
Coraz częściej słyszymy o osobach, które decydują się wyruszyć samotnie na trudną
wyprawę – opłynąć Ziemię, dotrzeć na biegun, zdobyć niedostępny szczyt itp. Napisz
rozprawkę, w której przedstawisz wady i zalety odbycia takiej wyprawy samotnie.

A lot of people link their passion of travelling with the appointed objective. Nowadays more an more often they decided to set off alone to the difficult expedition for example to sail around the earth, to reach to the pole, to climb the inaccessible peak, e.t.c. Travelling alone into distant expedition has many advantages and disadvantages.
The main advantages of having great satisfaction with the reached objective for example conquest ofthe sumit. We are pleased, that we overcame own weakness and fear. The difficult lonely travel which we already finished give strong feeling the value and happiness.Another advantage of being brave is often noticed by mediaan the press. Acording to reports and journalists is it great act which should be publicisied. This a man, which finished the travel happily become famous, grant interviews for example to the newspaper or appear on TV.
The first disadvantage of acting on your own is very dangerous. During of travel we are exposed to the highlyriskful. Nobody will help us when for instance we have an accident or we are attacked. In particular for criminal it is easier to attack one person than two. One other disadvantagesof paying costs oneself. We aren't able to divide costs between themselves. For example costs of the room or of equipment, we must cover alone. As a result are it is a big expenses.
Taking everything into account this travel alone is a daring decision, but also an unusual experience very much. I think that it is a great lesson of advising oneself, the humility, the openness and the kindliness. In my opinion the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

...but also an unusual experience very much. dlaczego 'b.dużo'? Tak będzie źle. Spróbuj inaczej ;))

A czy tak ogólnie jest dobrze oprócz tego very much?

Nie jest.
Nowadays more anD more often they decided .... dlaczego przeszły?
expedition too specific

This a man, which finished the travel happily become famous, grant interviews for example to the newspaper or appear on TV. ???

Dziękuję bardzo ;) Jeszcze jakieś błędy?

Mnostwo, np.

As a result are it is a big expenses.

Kto to pisal? Translator? Zdania chaotyczne.

Czy teraz jest lepiej ??
A lot of people couple your passion with appointed aim. Nowadays more and more often they decide to set off on a difficult journey lonelily, for example to sail around the earth, to reach to the pole, to climb the inacessible peak, e.t.c. Alone travelling into far travel has many advantages and disadvantages.
The main advantage of having great satisafaction with attained aim. We are very happy that we overcame own weakness and a fear. Finished and successful travel give a high self-esteem and luck. Another advantage of being brave is often perceive by media and the press. Acording to reports and journalists it is great performance which should be publicisied. We become famous and give an interview to the newspaper or appear on TV.
The first disadvantages of travelling on your own is a very dangerous. During of travel we are expose to the high risk. Nobody will help us when for instance we will have an accident or we will be attack. In particular for criminal it is easier to attack one person than two. One other disadvantages of paying all costs oneself. We aren't able to devide costs between themselves. For example travel costs or equimpment we must cover alone, as a result it is a big expenses.
Taking everything into account this hard journey alone is a daring decision, but also an unusual experience. I think that it is a great lesson of advising oneself, the humility and the openess. In my opinion the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Z góry dziękuję za sprawdzenie ;))

The main advantage of having great satisafaction with attained aim. niekompletne zdanie.
Finished and successful travel give a high self-esteem and luck. verb. Słowo 'luck' jest źle użyte.
luck znaczy szczęście np. w kontekście 'przynieść komuś szczęście'

One other disadvantages of IS paying all costs oneself by one person. We aren't able to devide SHARE costs between themselv np np

Nie jest lepiej. Nawet nie wiedzialabym od czego tu zaczac.
Podziwiam kolege Aaric, ze w ogole probuje, tu jest blad na bledzie.
Napisz sama, bez translatora , prostymi zdaniami.

Czy takie zakończenie może być ? ;(

Taking everything into account, altough there are some drawbacks of travelling alone there are far more advantages. In my opinion the travel is a daring decision, but also an unusual experience in our life. This is the best lesson of dealing with the stress and in humility.