please help me ! part two

Hi !
To już wszystko. Proszę pomóż mi, na pewno są błędy. Proszę o poprawę.

The bored man with an overgrown red beard looked at us with suprise. Jess and me showed him out Scratch-and-Win tickets. He couldn’t believe. After that he registered our winning. Jess won one tousant dollars and I hit the jackpot. One million dollars was my but I cann’t take this money instant of course. We settled formalities and everybody were in high spirits. We could come back home. Me and Jessica were going on the street calmy and slowly when I catched sight that on foot I had my rose slippers. we roared with laughter and then we knowed why the people looked back. I had made a fool of myself but it wasn’t important. We bought a great pizza and went to me. My parents were in the seventh heaven when we told him our story. “Now you don’t need an allowance any more” – told my father and smiled joyful. After the week in central TottoLotto Point was handed me the cheque.
I’m satisfied from the victory but I know I’m still the same person. Now we are more wealthy and I will intend the money from the studies and amazing tour with my parents and Jess. I know that I wouldn’t have this withour her. I bought the ticket becouse of her. I know so that win you must try too.

... beard looked at us with suRprise.
Jess and 'me' (tutaj 'I') showed him ouR Scratch-and-Win tickets. He couldn't
believe IT. After that he registered our WIN. Jess won 'one tHousanD dollars and I hit the jackpot. One million dollars was mINE, but I 'cann't' (tutaj potrzeba couldn't) take this money OUT instantLY of course. We settled formalities and everyONE WAS in high spirits. 'Me and Jessica' (moze lepiej Jessica and I) 'were going' (went) on the street calmy and slowly when I 'catched' (CAUGHT - to jest czasow niereg.) sight (tutaj potrzeba ..of the fact)that 'on foot I had my rose slippers'-(zla kol. slow - I had my rose slippers on my feet). We roared with laughter and then we 'knowed' (KNEW-czas niereg) why the people looked 'back' (mozna at us).
We bought a great pizza and went to 'me' (nie, lepiej to my house/flat/home). My
parents were in 'the' (bez the) seventh heaven when we told 'him' (tutaj THEM-bo parents) our story.
..any more" - 'told my father' (nie, -albo said my father albo my father told me), and HE smiled joyfulLY. After A week in central TottoLotto Point 'was handed me the cheque' (-zla kol. slow - a cheque was handed to me).
I'm satisfied WITH the victory but I know..
Now we are more wealthy and I 'will' (will niepotr) intend TO USE the money FOR MY studies and FOR AN amazing tour with my parents and Jess. I know that I wouldn't have this withouT her. I bought the ticket becAuse of her. I know 'so' (that in order to win) you must try too.

Serdecznie dziękuję ! To dla mnie bardzo wazne. Jeszcze raz wielkie dzięki !