Wypracowanie o internecie/komputerach - ktoś sprawdzi?

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Witam!

Mam gorącą prośbe o pomoc przy pisaniu krótkiego wypracowanka. Pierwszą część już poprawiłem, ale z drugą mam trochę gorzej. Mógłby ktoś pomóc?

Part I

Cytat:
Sitting at the computer today, you probably don't even wonder how the word "computer" has evolved just over the last few years. It was only 10 yeas ago that upon hearing "computer", you automatically thought of one big box, and the other, bigger box called the "monitor". Today, the very same word refers not only to the "physical object" as before, but it also means POSSIBILITIES.


Part II

Cytat:
So... what to bring about alternation like this? The answer is simple... the INTERNET!
The internet make us depended of technology on degree comparable only with car or cell phones but only internet do this so fast!
Where lies the phenomenon of internet? On viewpoint of typical modern-country citizen, all the most important inventions serve to improve communication among people. So it happens that the internet do this the cheapest, the fastest and just the simplest!
Do you realize that the first thing do której internet został użyty to wysłanie e-maila (nie mam pojęcia jak to napisać po angielsku)?
Today with internet you can do shopping, pay your bills, listen music, watch films, strike up a new relationships, earn money and many others but all of that possibilities are come later. All that buzz called" internet" starts up from fundamental human necessity of communication.
Today computer in off-line state is just a typewriter and in equally that same level pulls up ours attention.
The computer occurs only a tool in hands of internet.
Sitting at the computer today, you probably 'don't' WOULD NOT even wonder how the word "computer" has evolved just over the last few years. It was only 10 yeas ago that upon hearing THE WORD "computer", you automatically thought of one big box, and the other, bigger box called the "monitor". Today, the very same word refers not only to the "physical object" as before, but it also means POSSIBILITIES.

So... what 'to bring' BROUGHT about SUCH AN 'alternation' (zle slowo) like this? The answer is simple... the INTERNET!
The internet makeS us 'depended' (zla czescs mowy) 'of' ON technology 'on' (kalka z polskiego tutaj TO A degree comparable only with (a gdzie przedimek?) car or cell phones but only internet (brak modal) do this 'so fast' (zle, tutaj FASTER)!
Where 'lies the phenomenon of internet' (zla kol slow..does the ph...)? 'On' (znowu kalka z polskiego, oducz sie myslec po polsku, bo przsez to robisz bledy...FROM THE viewpoint of (brak przedimka) typical modern-country citizen, all (brak slowa) the most important inventions serve to improve communication among people. So it happens that the internet (brak modala) do this the cheapest, the fastest and just the simplest (ale tu brak rzeczownika na koncu)!
Do you realize that the first thing 'do której' (to nie sa slowa jez. ang. FOW WHICH) THE internet 'został użyty' (WAS USED was to send emails)?
Today with (brak przedimka) internet you can do THE shopping, pay your bills, listen (brak slowa) music, watch films, strike up 'a' (przeciez nie dajemy 'a' przed l. mn) new relationships, earn money and many others (przecinek przed 'but') but all of 'that' THOSE possibilities 'are come' CAME later. All that buzz called (brak przedimka) " internet" starts up from fundamental human necessity of communication.
Today computer in off-line state is just a typewriter and 'in' ON equally that same level 'pulls up' (tego nie rozumiem) 'ours' (nie, to jest zle, poczytaj o roznicy pomiedzy OUR i OURS) attention.
The computer 'occurs' (niepotr) IS only a tool in (brak przedimka) hands of (brak przedimka) internet.

Co ty to robisz z tymi przedimkami (a, an, the). Prosze nauczyc sie ich uzywac....
Dziękuję bardzo! Już za niedługo znów będę prosił o sprawdzenie innej pracy. Obiecuję że poprawie się z zaimków :D

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