poprawa prezentacji, pomóżcie

Cześć, mam za dwa dni egzamin językowy na wyjazd na Erasmusa i muszę przygotować krótką prezentację o sobie, swojej uczelni i kraju, do którego chciałbym pojechać. Czy moglibyście pomóc mi i sprawdzić, czy nie narobiłem za dużo rażących byków?? Dzięki wielkie :):)

My name is Andrzej/Andrew but a lot of my friends call me ENDRJU. I was born the fifteenth of October 1989 so I am 22 years old. I’m studying here, in Rzeszów but I come from XXXXX. It’s small but beautiful village near YYYYY, on halfway between Krakow and Rzeszow. I live with my parents, two sisters and four brothers. Whole my family is fantastic. I never get bored with them. I’ve got one dog and two cats. I like playing with my pets. Generally I like all animals of each species, with exception of snakes. I fear them.

You see how I look, so I’m not describing myself now. Maybe I’m telling something about my personality. I think I'm a positive person. Lots of people allege that I'm shy and cautious. It’s not true. Ok, I’m quiet, calm or sometimes not self-confident but only for people who don’t know me well. My friends, family know that I’m cheerful, easy-going, friendly, hard-working, loyal, patient and honest. This honesty, unfortunately isn’t always perceived in a positive way by other people. But I think that everyone should be sincere and truthful with other person and tell it what does he think about particular situation. I can be talkative, sometimes too much. My another disadvantages are obstinacy, forgetfulness and pessimism. I try to fight it as I can. I really work on myself.

I don’t have any special hobbies such as: collecting stamps or practicing sports. I, simply, like to do many things when I’ve a free time. And when I’ve that spare time I’m always trying to spend it in a best possible way. I hang out with my friends once a week. Then we go to the cinema, disco or parties. When I’m at home I usually read books, watch TV, films (but only if the cast is good) or do crossword puzzles. When I was young I liked playing sport best, especially volleyball. I used to play it but now I don’t have much spare time because I’m working and studying so I’m concerned on learning. I also like spending time with my family at the barbecue or meetings. I like doing a lot of things, however my main interest is music and computer. The computer is my window to the world. I really like to chat and meet different people. I often meet people there, from whom I learn many interesting facts. And last but not least – photography. When I’ve a free time I like making photos.But I’ve never thought about it as my hobby. I like taking pictures once in a while, usually in summer when I go to some interesting place.


I’m studying at Rzeszów University of Technology. I’m studying two faculties: management and logistics. Sequentially in the third and second year. This college takes its name by Ignacy Łukasiewicz who was a scientist, inventor, chemist and a businessman. He invented the oil lamp, created the oil industry in Poland and was an activist for independence. Łukasiewicz was the first person in the world, which took advantage of oil. He was very efficient organizer, and he finally made his large fortune. He was also a great community leader. He promoted the establishment of companies, building roads and bridges, schools, hospitals, etc., by funding several initiatives of his own pocket. He struggled with poverty and alcoholism in the region, made non-contributory pension fund for his workers. All his life he was related to Podkarpackie province, and he did much of the region. He is considered one of his biggest benefactors of Podkarpacie.

University was founded in 1951 and currently has 6 faculties and 26 specializations. These are mainly economic and technical fields of study. It’s also the only university in Poland, where are trained pilots in civil aviation. The university has about 15,000 students. I must say that I’ve met there a lot of nice, smart and interesting people, not only students but also teachers. This university is known for its high standard of teaching and lecturers, which are very skilled, well-read and demanding.


Which country did I choose? I chose Belgium and Turkey. Why?
In general, we hear that the time spent studying abroad is full of unforgettable experiences and impressions adventure. It's like a fun amusement park - every corner waiting for you new, unusual surprise. Leaving to the Erasmus everyone expects that he experiences something new. The new place is a new life. Therefore, exotic countries still enjoy the greatest interest. If we want experience adventure we’ll look a place, which will be managed to amaze us. In the era of low-cost airlines, we can get to Berlin, Bonn and Prague - it is now for us, "something normal". These cities are similar to Warsaw, Poznan and Rzeszow. So most of students chose universities which are on the south of Europe. So friends of mine, who also want to participate in Erasmus Exchange, want to go to Turkey to relax on the beaches, play and get to know about Turkish culture. They urge me to go with them and I agreed. But ,to be honest, I’d like to go to Belgium. It’s a small country in western Europe, but has a great, wonderful history, culture and a lot to offer. Official languages are Dutch and French, but everyone speaks English too. From this country comes chips, chocolates, comics (Smurfs, Lucky Luke).
What were my main criteria for the selection of this country: an opportunity to know new cultures and people, learning a language (English and Dutch), the location of the country, life in this country, events and expenses. Belgium is a great cauldron of all cultures and nationalities, quite different than Poland. Belgium is very nicely located, because you can visit not only it but also other countries: France, Netherlands, Germany or Luxembourg. Everywhere is so close. So you go to one state and you’ll have the opportunity to visit four countries. So you go to one state and you have the opportunity to visit four countries. That's all a theory which I was able to read and see on the map. About everything else I want to know and see when I go to Belgium.

Proszę, pomoże ktoś?? Wiem, że jest tego trochę, ale chyba szybko się to czyta. Będę wdzięczny za poprawę nawet wybiórczych zdań.
dzięki

pomoge, ale badz cierpliwy

<xx> = usun
[b.p.] = brakuje przedimka
[n.po] = nie potrzebne
[orto] = blad ortograficzny

My name is Andrzej/Andrew, but a lot of my friends call me ENDRJU{po jakiemu to jest?}. I was born ON the fifteenth of October 1989, so I am 22 years old. I’m studying here, in Rzeszów but I come from XXXXX. It’s small but beautiful village near YYYYY, <on> halfway between Krakow and Rzeszow. I live with my parents, two sisters and four brothers. MY whole <my> family is fantastic. I never get bored with them. I’ve got one dog and two cats. I like playing with my pets. Generally, I like all animals, [of each species...n.po], with [bp] exception of snakes. [I fear them...n.po.].

<You see how I look, so I’m not describing myself now> I HAVE ATTACHED A PHOTOGRAPH?, SO IT ISN"T NECESSARY TO DESCRIBE MYSELF. Maybe <I’m telling> I'LL SHARE something about my personality. I think I'm a positive person. Lots of people allege that I'm shy and cautious. It’s not true. Ok, I’m quiet, calm or sometimes not self-confident but only <for> WITH people who don’t know me well. My friends AND family know ME AS A <that I’m> cheerful, easy-going, friendly, hard-working, loyal, patient and honest PERSON. This honesty, unfortunately isn’t always perceived in a positive way by other people. But I think that everyone should be sincere and truthful with other <person> PEOPLE and tell <it> THEM what ONE <does he> thinkS about A particular situation. I can be talkative, sometimes <too much> OVERLY SO. <My an>Other {disadvantages...nie podoba mi to slowo, sprobuj moze "flaws"} <are> INCLUDE obstinacy, forgetfulness and pessimism. I try to fight it as BEST I can. I really TRY TO work on IMPROVING myself.

I don’t have any special hobbies such as<:> collecting stamps or practicing sports. I<,> simply<,> like to do many things when I HAve <a> free time. <And> When I HAve <that> SOME spare time I<’m always> try<ing> to spend it in <a> THE best possible way. I USUALLY hang out with my friends once a week AND we go to the cinema, disco or parties. When I’m at home, I usually read books, watch TV, films (but only if the cast is good) or do crossword puzzles. When I was young, I liked playing sport best, especially volleyball. I DON'T PLAY MUCH VOLLEYBALL ANYMORE BECAUSE <but now> I don’t have much spare time because I WORK AND STUDY A LOT. <so I’m concerned >. I also like spending time with my family at <the> barbecueS or [meetings...moze "family gatherings"?]. I like doing a lot of things, however my main interestS <is> ARE music and [spending time on my] computer. The computer is my window to the world. I really like to chat and meet different people. I often meet people there, from whom I learn many interesting facts. <And> Last but not least – I ENJOY photography. When I HAve <a> free time I like Taking photos but I’ve never <thought about> CONSIDERED it as my hobby. I like taking pictures once in a while, usually in [bp] summer when I go to some interesting placeS.


I’m studying at Rzeszów University of Technology. I’m studying two faculties: management and logistics. {Sequentially in the third and second year...to nie jest zdanie, popraw}. This college takes its name <by> FROM Ignacy Łukasiewicz {kiedy zyl?} who was a scientist, inventor, chemist and <a> businessman. He invented the oil lamp, created the oil industry in Poland and was an activist for independence. Łukasiewicz was the first person in the world, which took {advantage of oil...co to znaczy?}. He was [bp] very efficient organizer, and he <finally> EVENTUALLY made <his> A large fortune. [He was also a great community leader. He promoted the establishment of companies, building roads and bridges, schools, hospitals, etc., by funding several initiatives <of> FROM his own pocket. He struggled with poverty and alcoholism in the region, made non-contributory pension fund for his workers. All his life he was related to Podkarpackie province, and he did much of the region. He is considered one of his biggest benefactors of Podkarpacie. ...nie rozumiem DLACZEGO opisujesz tego czlowieka? po co?

THE University was founded in 1951 and currently has 6 faculties and 26 specializations. These are mainly economic and technical fields of study. It’s also the only university in Poland, where [are trained pilots...kolejnosc slow] in civil aviation. The university has about 15,000 students. <I must say that> I’ve met <there> a lot of nice, smart and interesting people THERE, not only students but also teachers. This university is known for its high standard of teaching and lecturers, which are very skilled, well-read and demanding.


Which country did I choose? I chose Belgium and Turkey. Why?
In general, we hear that the time spent studying abroad is full of unforgettable experiences and <impressions> adventureS. It's like a fun amusement park - [every corner waiting for you new, unusual surprise...kolejnosc slow: begin with the subject]. [Leaving to..zle slowo, moze "participating in"...nie bardzo wiem co chcesz tu napisac] the Erasmus [program?], everyone expects that he WILL experience<s> something new. The new [place..slabe slowo] is a new life. Therefore, exotic countries still enjoy the greatest interest. If we want TO experience adventure, we’ll look FOR a place<,> which will <be managed to> amaze us. In the era of low-cost airlines, we can EASILY <get> TRAVEL to Berlin, Bonn and Prague - it is now <for us,> "normal" FOR US. These cities are similar to Warsaw, Poznan and Rzeszow, so most <of> students chose universities which are LOCATED IN <on the> southERN <of> Europe. Friends of mine, who also want to participate in [bp]Erasmus Exchange, want to go to Turkey to relax on the beaches, play, [??] LEARN about THE <get to know> Turkish culture. They urgeD me to go with them and I agreed. But ,to be honest, I’d like to go to Belgium. It’s a small country in western Europe WITH a <great,> wonderful history, GREAT culture and HAS a lot to offer. [bp] Official languages are Dutch and French, but everyone speaks English too. [From this country comes chips, chocolates, comics (Smurfs, Lucky Luke)...n.po].
<What were> My main criteria for the selection of this country INCLUDED: an opportunity to GET TO know new cultures and people, learning a language (English and Dutch), the location of the country, life in this country, events[??] and expenses. Belgium is a great cauldron of <all> cultures and nationalities, WHICH IS quite different than Poland. Belgium is very nicely located, <because you can visit not > GIVEN ITS CLOSE PROXIMITY TO other countries: France, the Netherlands, Germany AND Luxembourg. <Everywhere is so close>. <So> You [go to...czy "live in?"] one <state, chyba "country'> and you’ll have the opportunity to visit four OTHER countries.

[That's all a theory which I was able to read and see on the map. About everything else I want to know and see when I go to Belgium....popracuj dalej, koncowe zdanie sa slabe]