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Oto mój 'formal letter to a newspaper' dotyczący krótkiego tekstu o szkodliwości papierosów. Proszę o poprawki, z góry dzięki.

Dear Editor,
I am writing in response to your article on restrictions on smoking that in your opinion should be enforced immediately. I have always been concerning about problems of addictions so I am glad to read abut project of campaign against smoking.
In your article you are writing first and foremost about bad influence that cigarettes have on people’s physical and, furthermore, psychological health. Smoking is proven to be a dangerous addiction with which many people cannot deal without exterior help. The editorial insists on implementation of the ban on cigarette advertisements and, what is in my opinion most important, on imposing the strict law against smoking in all public areas.
Taking each of your arguments in turn, I have to agree with you in all aspects. Firstly, smoking has been proved to be the main cause of the lung cancer. Having such a knowledge the government should warn people about risks and should not permit to encourage to smoking by advertisements showing it as a pleasure. Secondly, it is certain that passive smoking affects on health so it is essential to protect people from the nicotine ’s smoke in public places. Secondly, it is certain that passive smoking affects on health so it is essential to protect people from the nicotine in public places. I would say that cigarettes should be treat almost like drags because of their destroying activity.
To conclude, I want to underline that changes in the policy of smoking are necessary. There is the strong need to take more care about people’s health so I hope that all arguments against smoking will be soon introduced into the law.
Yours faithfully,

A co sie stalo z 'the? - juz nie uzywamy?

I have always been 'concerning' CONCERNED about THE problems of addictions, so I am glad to read 'abut' (ortog) YOUR project of campaign against smoking.
In your article you are writing first and foremost about THE bad
influence that cigarettes have on people's physical and, furthermore,
psychological health. Smoking is proven to be a dangerous addiction with which many people cannot deal WITH without exterior help.
Firstly, smoking has been proved to be the main cause of 'the' (niepotr) lung cancer. Having such 'a' (niepotr) knowledge the government should warn people
about THE risks and should not permit 'to encourage' (tutaj inaczej...the ENCOURAGEMENT) 'to' OF smoking by advertisements showing it as a pleasure. Secondly, it is certain that passive smoking HAS affects on health, so it is essential to protect people from the nicotine's smoke in public places.
'Secondly' (ale juz wczesniej miales 'secondly-popraw), it is certain
that passive smoking affects on health so it is essential to protect
people from the nicotine in public places. -masz ten sam para 2 razy.
I would say that cigarettes should be treatED almost like 'drags' (TO jest zle slowo- zobacz w dobrym slowniku co to znaczy 'drags', tutaj DRUGS) because of their destroying activity.
To conclude, I want to underline that changes in the 'policy of smoking' (lepiej 'smoking policy') are necessary. There is 'the' A strong need to take more care about people's health, (przecinek przed 'so') so I hope that all arguments against smoking will be soon introduced into the law.