Prosba o sprawdzenie

Temat przeniesiony do archwium.
Witam!

Mialem opisac taki cytat: "A man is a success if he gets up in the morning and goes to bed at night,
and in between does what he wants to". Moglby mi ktos to sprawdzic :)

[code]How to reach the top.? How to be a successful man.? My favourite quotation tells:
Just do what you want. But isn't it real.? Success doesn't mean a lot of money or
prestige. Oh, in minds of million people success means money, but it's only the
propaganda to pull poor people to work as "slaves" to exploit them by corporations.
And those "slaves" think, that they work for success...
In my opinion SUCCESS is a relative concept. This idea oughtn't to be imposed us,
every one human should decide, what he needs and what he should do to get it and get
satisfaction. For one it is love, for another relax in the beach and for another
play the guitar. Only then every another person is able to be realized. To do it you
just need to getting up in the morning and going bed at night, and in between doing what
you want.[/code]
How to reach the top.? How to be a successful man.? My favourite
quotation 'tells' (prosze popracowac nad roznica pomiedzy tell, say) SAYS:
'But isn't it real' (nie rozumiem tgo zdania)?
'Oh' (takie fillers, to wiecej uzywamy w mowie, nie w pismie) In THE minds of millionS OF people success means money, but it's only 'the' (niepotr)
propaganda to 'pull' GET poor people to work as "slaves" AND to exploit them by
LARGE corporations. (bardzo dobrze napisane).
And those "slaves" think, that they ARE workING for success...
This idea 'oughtn't' (napisz to w calosci)to be imposed ON us, every 'one' (niepotr) human BEING should decide, what he needs and what he should do to
get it and get satisfaction. For one PERSON it is love, for another relaxING 'in' ON the beach and for another playING the guitar. Only then every 'another' (niepotr) person is able to be realized. To do 'it' THIS you
just need to 'getting' GET up in the morning and 'going' GO TO bed at night, and in between 'doing' DO what you want.
dziekowka :)

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