The girl that I am going to describe is called Kate Jefferson. I first met her five years ago when she came to my flat. 'Hello', she said diffidently. 'My name is Kate. I am your new
neighbur'. We started talking and were soon the best
of friends.
Kate is a very beautiful girl in her early twenties. I still
admite (sadze, ze zwyczajnie pomylilas przyciski 't' i 'r' sa tuz obok:)) her
apperance and tell her about the career of model . She is A tallish
and slim person with large blue eyes. Her carefully-styled hair is very long, blonde and wavy.
On her face (ja bym dal to na koniec zdania) there are dimples and a few beauty spots. Kate likes wearing
spohisticated clothes such as
colourful, patterned (to bym dal albo bez przecinka, albo polaczyl hyphenem) shirts and high-heeled shoes.
Kate's personality is an interesting mixture of contrasts (jakich? warto byloby wymienic:)). She is a sociable person who loves meeting people. What is more, my friend likes working hard. (przed tym zdaniem dobrze byloby cos dac do kontrastu). On the other hand, she tends to be bossy, because she likes telling people what to do.
In her free time, Kate loves dancing and singing. She enjoys English waltz and tango. Kate is a great singer too, and she prefers singing rock songs.
All in all, life is never dull when Kate is around. What should I do if I didn't meet such a kind person?
Praca niezla. Troszke literowek. Sprawdz tez, jakich innych konstruksji gramatycznych mozna uzyc przy opisie czegos, azeby nie laczyc zdania tylko przez 'and'. To jest ok. Ale mozna urozmaicic.
Np. as well as, though, altthough, despite. Concessive clauses by Ci tu pomogly.
Niech spojrza na to, bardziej doswiadczone wilki, sam sie ucze, tak jak Ty.