Jesli to ma byc rozprawka,to proponuje "should" w 1.zdaniu "Czy mlodzi kryminalisci POWINNI...?"
The number of crimes commited by young people has increased recently. Some people think that young criminals should be rehabilitated.
More people,including myself, think that they should go to prison. Below I present the reasons for my way of thinking.
Firstly:If a person commits a crime when he/she is young,it is likely that he will commit more of them when he/she grows up.
Carl Panzram commited his first crime when he was 8 and when he grew up,he killed many people, burnt a school building with students inside, and commited other crimes.
Ed Kemper shot his grandparents when he was 15 and when he grew up, he killed more people...
In addition-rehabilitation isn't as effective as isolation. This process is too costly and too time-consuming.
On the (...) - we should rehabilitate young criminals because they will become better people in the future. I don't agree with my friends. I think rehabilitation is an unsure solution-we don't know if the underage criminals will become better people or kill somebody or burn schools.
In conclusion: (mozesz napisac,ze ryzyko jest zbyt wielkie,zeby pozwalac takim ludziom chodzic na wolnosci,ze moze sie wydarzyc wiecej tragedii i lepiej zamknac ta osobe w wiezieniu i byc spokojnym,ze chociaz jeden potencjalny zbrodniarz jest pod kontrola;ze fakt,ze ktos raz popelnil zbrodnie,moze oznaczac,ze nie cofnie sie przed tym takze nastepnym razem;ze,jesli ktos jest wystarczajaco "dorosly" na popelnienie zbrodni,powinien byc automatycznie traktowany jako ktos,kto jest wystarczajaco "dorosly" na poniesienie kary;no i wreszcie-napisz tez,ze uniewinnianie mlodocianych przestepcow moze stac sie zacheta dla ich rowiesnikow do popelniania nawet drobnych zbrodni,bo kary przeciez nie bedzie.)
Slowka,ktore Ci sie moga przydac do pisania konkluzji:
risk-ryzyko
tragedy
to be at peace - byc spokojnym
under control
potential-potencjalny
treat-traktowac
punish-karac
punishment-kara
encouragement-zacheta
Pamietaj o zachowywaniu czasow,dodawaniu koncowki "s" do 3.osoby.
I o nieregularnych czasownikach (formach przeszlych):
grow-grew
shoot-shot